Published January 8, 2006
Based on a fantasy book I'm writing...let me know what you think.
In the fear, I seek you
In my strength, I find you
In the dark, I see you
In my heart, I am you.
Bless me, dark lady
Give me hope
I, your chosen,
Show me what it is
I should do.
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ehh i guess i would understand it more if i knew the back story to it. it was rather brief and didn't strike a chord with me. i got the general point of the character "dark lady" but i believe it needed more poetic speech - similies, metaphors, comparisons and odd combinations of imagery - but maybe that's just me.